Robot Rampage

WALT write a creative story using a story starter.

‘’O no” what has this crazy robot done “I need to go have a look”. Hemi leapt out of his chair nervously and followed the shouting noise and it led to a giant farm. On the farm lettuce was being grown as well as orange carrots, and Orange and Green pumpkin. The robot was cutting all the baby lettuce from the ground. The farmer was not very happy. The angry farmer was running as fast as a cheetah around chasing the robot.

What was he going to do. He needed to get to the robot and press the button on his right arm that makes him power off. But how was we going to get to the robot the robot is to fast. He needed to think of a plan. He needed to get to his right arm. He rushed home and grabbed supplies from the garage to make a flying fast robot that can hopefully catch the robot Hemi worked and worked as fast as he could. Imagine if by the time he gets back all the lettuce,Carrots and pumpkin were gone that would be terrible.

 He hopes that this robot machine will work. If it doesnt he is in deep trouble he is probably already in deep trouble anyway. He ran back to the farm listing to the shouting noise and it sounds like evan moor people. The Farmer's wife was yelling as well. Hemi set the robot free. The robot is basically attached to red buttons. The robot crazily chasing the robot won't stop until he gets to the red button. The robot presses the red button and the robot turns of a fell to the ground. Everyone new it was my robot so what was Hemi going to do. He ran and ran until he got home with a bunch of grannies and grandpas that love there beautiful gardens chasing Hemi.

 Hemi locked myself in the shed and stayed in there until I thought everyone was gone. Thankfully everyone was gone. Hemis Dad pulled up the Drive and all the lawns were mowed “WOW” dad said “I can't believe it you normally hate mowing the lawns”. “I'll have to get you to mow the lawns more often.” “Oh noo”

Creative writing

WALT create a piece of writing which includes 5 words that we have been given. This week the words were: Pink,Huge,Bridge,Sprinkled and daffodil.

The big week

By Merryn

We decided to go to the park at the park there are beautiful daffodils there is also a Bridge going over a lake. When you get to the end of the bridge there is Pink, gold, yellow, orange, green, glitter sprinkled all over the ground. There is also a row of trees and on the other side there is a huge playground that has 5 things of everything like 5 slides 5 swings 5 seesaws. It is pretty cool and it is free to go to and it is normally packed with people and the good thing is that it's just across the road from us. Anyway it was time to head back home now and have dinner Mcdonalds was for dinner I was really excited. It was really yum. I asked my Mum if my friend Aliyah could come and stay the night she said you have to ask her Mum. So Mum grabbed her phone and rang Aliyah's Mum she said I will be 15 minutes away. In 15 minutes she was here we didn't have much time till bed so we watched a movie. We had to go to bed because it was getting late. We woke up the next morning and had pancakes for breakfast. So we went back to the park and when we were on the tallest slide in the park Aliyah fell to the ground on the concrete and broke her nose. I had my phone and called Mum she said call the ambulance so I called 111. She said 111 what's your emergency I said my friend just fell off a slide and broke her nose. I told her my location and they were her in the next 5 mins. She didn't want to go in the ambulance by herself so I came with her.Her nose was pretty yuck It had blood dripping down. We arrived at the hospital then Aliyahs Mum arrived but I still wanted to stay with her. We went inside a room apparently they were gonna click her nose back in place. “AOOWWW’’ I looked over and her nose was straight I was daydreaming for a bit until I heard her screaming. Me and Aliyah were allowed to go home now which was good. We got home. Aliyah didn't want to go to that park again and I can see why :) she had to go home now and have dinner there was school tomorrow so we had to go to bed at 8:30 and it was 7:00 anyway so she drove to her house when she left I ate my dinner and went to bed. The next morning it was school I woke up at 7:30 I was lucky I didn't sleep in. Aliyah came to school today which was weird I would think that if I broke my nose I wouldn't come to school the next day. Aliyah had a big bandage on her nose how could she breathe. Everyone was asking if she was ok “what happened” “Did it hurt” that's all people have been saying to her ALL DAY. Even the teachers. I feel bad for her Aliyah was relieved the day was over and know more questions were asked until we were walking home everyone else that was walking that hadn't asked her even some people that did ask her “what happen” “does it hurt” “How did that happen” Finally we were home she was at her house and I was at my house. Well that has been a big week for all of us especially Aliyah. The end

My Magical Creature 100 WC

Walt descibe a Magical creature that lives in the pink lake or a animal hospital

 There lived a magical unicorn her name was Shimmer she lived at a animal hospital for unicorns all the unicorns had something wrong with them. Some of them had had their leg taken off. Some of them evan had one eye. Shimmers isn't as bad as the other ones but it is bad enough to go to the hospital. It has been 3 days since she has had her surgery. A special thing about her is she has magical powers her horn can heal people but only little cuts not huge ones. She can fly, She has invisibility, she has super speed.

100 word challenge

Walt: use 100 words to write a story.
At the playground me and my sister asked our Mum if we were allowed to have a play on the playground across the road. Since that was the only one we were allowed to go to because it was close to our house. But it was a little creepy because it had a graveyard next to it. I slid down the crimson slide and and climbed up the purple ladder. It was starting to get darker. Our Mum rang us for dinner but our phones were in our bags and we couldn't hear the phone ringing. We decided to go to our Nana's grave, it was misty. I thought it would be funny to prank Aliyah so I shouted “RUN” and Aliyah frantically ran around screaming and ran home. =

100 word challenge

Gaint cup

My family and I decided to go to a forest far, far away. It was a little bit scary. At the forest as we were walking I saw a white, giant cup. In the cup is gold, shiny designs that look like leaves that fall off trees in Autumn. There was also a gold line on the inside with a little line beside it and on the handle was a little bit of gold. On the outside were two lines of gold. I was really confused when I saw the cup in the ground I wonder how it got there?

100 word challenge

This week we were given a story starter but what if I was in charge? My focus was on making my story interesting and staying within 100 word limit.

….If I was in charge….
 My Sister and I were on our way to KMart to get me some new clothing . We arrived and walked into the shop we walked over to the clothing section but there was no clothing. My sister said “lets go and get a chocolate bar instead.” So we went to get a chocolate bar and they were all out of chocolate bars. I was thinking of something else we needed I thought of hair ties but they were all out of hair ties. If I was in charge of KMart I would make sure there were lots of chocolate bars, lots of girls clothes and lots of hair ties.

Newspaper report 1

Crime scene

by Merryn Mokomoko

In Christchurch there has been a terrible crime scene on August the 15 2014. There had been a little 7 year old farm girl running around her farm. She saw a man wearing a black mask she said

“What are you doing here?” he just walked closer and closer and chopped her legs off and threw her legs in a pond nearby and threw her body on the other side of the pond. All you could see was half of her legs and her small black gumboots. Police officers have been trying to investigate but they haven't found any clues!

The piano

       The Piano       

Make a copy, rename and start your writing on your copy.

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Click on the url below and watch the short clip.

The Piano

Before you start writing

This video is about a man  who remembers his past and recalls his memories. Think about how he would be feeling and other memories that this might trigger.

Create  

WALT write a descriptive piece of writing from the old man’s point of view as he recalls his memories.

Success Criteria

We need to focus on these things

• Full stops, capital letters,
• Paragraphs
• We need to follow the sentence tools for our opening paragraphs.

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Once this is completed you can publish it on your personal blog.

WALT write a piece  of  writing from the old mans point of view as he recalls his memories.

The Piano

I am a kind old man that is very good at the piano. I know that I am getting old now and I might die soon so I am going back to some of my memories that I can remember. As I am playing the piano I start to remember My wife that past away from cancer 8 years ago. I also start to remember when we went on holiday to Fiji it was lovely there we had a nice time together, we went diving together and found lots of cool shells. I look beside me and I imagine My wife playing the piano next to me. I think of some times like when I went to war and I saw my brother die, It was terrible my own brother was dying in my arms I tried to help him but it was too late. Meanwhile I feel sad and I want to remember some happy times, I remember for my 7th birthday my dad got me my own ride on horse it had a nice fluffy soft mane with eyes that looked like they were real. As soon as I had opened it I new that it was the present I had ever got. Unfortunately my dad past away not that long ago I can remember my dad giving it to me and the big smile he had on his face was a nice way to remember him. Playing and playing the piano I start to remember my mum, she was a lovely old lady she would give me the tightest hugs in the world my face would go bright red. My mother also died it wasn't a disease or anything she just got really sick she couldn't walk and she could barely talk. So we took her to hospital and from there she past away. Luckily I have my grandson to keep me company since I love him so much I handed my ride on horse to my grandson he loves it evan tho it is not like a scooter that they have now it is still the best present ever. I start to remember some more memories like when my grandson was only little and he was just born he was the most lovely thing ever. I also start to remember the day me and my wife got married it was so beautiful we got to go in a limo away for tea we had all our family and friends come we had every sort of lolly for desert  and we had every type of ice cream for dessert and we had really yum stuff for tea I really miss having my wife around but I can suck it up. As I am remembering the wedding I also start to remember the day that my wife died that was heartbreaking I remember being away from her for 2 weeks and then I went to go see her and she wasn't in her room so I asked the people behind the desks. I asked where is my wife they said what is her name I said lucy i'm sorry but she past away last night I burst into tears and walk away. I can't really remember any other things and start to get tired so I stop playing and leave. But I think of one more memory so I jump back on my piano before bed because this is a really good memory it was when I owned a farm with all sorts of animals there were fat ones small tiny ones and big ones lots of them I need to go to bed soon so I stop and go to sleep good night. The end

Mud slide 100 word challenge

Week #45   

World Events for your writing

I’m sure you won’t have missed the events in Barcelona, Spain this week or the devastation caused by the mud slide in Sierre Leone and the violence in Charlottesville, Virginia. The prompt this week uses the emotions that the media has shown us.

Latest prompt

As I said at the top of this page, the events around the world this week:

… as it came rushing towards us we…

Mudslide

I woke up this morning late for work so I jumped out of bed and got ready. As I am brushing my teeth I look on my phone and see that it is 8:00am “Ahh I should be at work by now.” I start walking to work now and I see a hill that looks like the mud on it might fall. As it came rushing towards me I scream as loud as fireworks. I look around and see lots of people crying and asking for help. All I could think is that so many people have lost their family.

Afternoon run

……. Afternoon run

I am going for my afternoon run around my neighborhood. There are so many cars driving around and quite a lot of people out at at lunch time. I think most people are out to get lunch. I had my earphones on so I couldn't hear anything and I wasn't focusing on the road It was starting to get a little bit darker and cars were starting to turn their headlights on. I am feeling so puffed right now.So I take a break and sit down “boom” a flash of light shines in my face I get such a fright……...

Titanium

Walt usa a technique to carefully craft our writing.


If I  ran away, if I was sick and stayed at home, if I had been smarter, then none of this would have happened.  Frightened and scared that I am not going to get home, depressed because I couldn't believe what I had done. Walking down a messy corridor with papers everywhere and spilt ink on the ground a rat runs in between my legs. Slowly walking into a small room with knocked over tables and ripped wallpaper.  I feel angry and anxious, Grinding  my teeth; biting my nails; scrunching my fists. I leave the room and then... If I  ran away, if I was sick and stayed at home, if I had been smarter, then none of this would have happened.  Frightened and scared that I am not going to get home, depressed because I couldn't believe what I had done. Walking down a messy corridor with papers everywhere and spilt ink on the ground a rat runs in between my legs. Slowly walking into a small room with knocked over tables and ripped wallpaper.  I feel angry and anxious, Grinding  my teeth; biting my nails; scrunching my fists. I leave the room and then...

Beyond the lines

Beyond the LInes

WALT write a narrative through the eyes of one of the children or one of the soldiers.

As me and my friends were on the ship to go to war we all huddled up so we could keep warm and because there wasn't much room. When we arrived at the beach we saw the Turkish people waiting for us to arrive. I walked down the ramp and ran into a puddle. The Turkish people had put barbed wire on the ground so we could get cut.

The Turkish people had bombs so did we, they had helicopters but we didn't have any. They were dropping bombs and we had to keep on running. We were running as fast as a race car. I didn't like it because I had to see all my mates get shot and there were people getting shot in there cheek and I could smell the blood.

I hide behind a pile of dirt then BOOM It gives me a fright. I look behind me and then another man gets killed. I take a deep breath and keep on running.

The cloud

WALT Write a narrative

The cloud

I was made by a scientist to help people and make sure everyone is ok. We also set up lots of cameras inside me so the scientist could control me. He had cameras all around the wall so he could see to. He let me out the window so  he could see if I work.

I worked fine so off I went I could go through windows,in the middle of buildings, down roads, and watch people. There was a fire down a street and put it out with my rain. I made dogs bark at night .

I could travel all over the world my favorite place to go to is New Zealand. I like to visit the sky tower and rainbows end and other places.

I could also see my scientist to and I saw him disconnect all the cameras for me to see and for him. So it was pitch black all I could see was black, so I made problems. I was making lightning and making floods. My scientist tracked me down and put a potion on me a poof I'm gone .

storyboard on myths

WALT Summarise a myth using a storyboard